I can't imagine spending over a month writing your YC application is something PG would recommend, but I do love the idea of having a few random people explain your application back to you. That's great advice about being sure you're writing is clear in general.

I can't imagine "we're already making money" and the fact that you were doing it monetization journalism (an RFS and a tough one) didn't help you get in more than the clarity of your application though. That seems to be a proof point beyond anything you could have written, to me.